Iam going to post my poems here. I am not really happy with my I poem yet, but it will do I guess. The first half of the poem doesn’t work for me. I really found this type of poem hard to write.
I Poem: saturn.doc
Concrete Poem: Poem:concrete-poem.doc concrete-poem-2.doc
Found found-poem.doc
Haiku: my-flower-garden.doc
I must say, your word choice is just right on! Each poem is so carefully composed. I love the phrase- ebb and flow! The ocean theme is beautiful for “Second Dolphin.” What is the screeching sentinel? A dolphin? Just a guess…
And your earth angel brought good news! Please keep us posted on your little one. Do you have a tentative date?
Is this a picture of your garden : )
And Wow, oh wow! You have written a persona shape poem!!! How amazing! I am so excited to read this poem; I have read it 3 times now! I love the alliterative phrases and the similes! And it is packed with facts! One question, why is named after Cronus? Could you expand on that? I love them all!
Comment by fryeem — February 27, 2008 @ 12:55 am
Screeching sentinels are supposed to be seagulls, but the picture that is supposed to be in the background does not show up for some reason. I will have to show you on my computer in class. I think that the poem makes more sense with the picture. I tried to make the screeching sentinel statements look bird-like, but considering the phrases, dolphins would work there as well.
As for the adoption, we have submitted our $500 application this past week and are eagerly awaiting confirmation. We will attend a meeting in Raleigh over Easter break and then begin on our home study shortly after that. The homestudy could be as quick as a month or so and then we wait to be picked by our very own earth angel. We are hoping 3 to 4 months. That seems a little scary to me for 2 reasons. One the thought that I would have to come up with 11,000 dollars in 3 months freaks me out. Two I have been preparing to be a Mom for a long time, but it seems that if I were pregnant I would have 7 or 8 months to get acclimated to such a major life change. It worries me a little that I could be looking at that change a bit sooner.
Yes, that is my garden. We moved into my aunt’s house after her alzheimers caused her to live in a rest home. She had the most beautiful flower gardens. She was not able to work on them the last 10 years or so and I have not been able to work on them the last 4 years so, I guess I have my own little secret garden to perk up.
As for Cronus, well I was unsure if I should go for his Greek name or Roman name. Saturn or Cronus was Jupiter’s father which I thought was interesting since Jupiter was larger than Saturn.I tried to think about how to put the part about Jupiter in there, but was not sure how to format that. At the begining I was really hung up on keeping each sentence to it’s line length. But it is my poem and I can do with it as I choose, so if I want to split a sentence between 2 lines, then I will. Thanks for the info!
Comment by secondolphin — February 27, 2008 @ 3:24 am
Christy,
Where do you get your ideas? I am doing a mythology unit with your mother’s favorite group of students. We spent several days discussing how the planets (except for Earth) have Roman names. We talked about who Cronus is and how similar he is to his father-Father Sky. Jupiter is the larger planet, but remember Jupiter defeated Cronus. Maybe that’s why Jupiter is “bigger” than Saturn. I would love a copy of this poem for future reference (with your permission of course!)
The found poem I remember came from your soul. What raw emotions! That’s why it’s so beautiful. One of the people in our group made the comment about how well it came together for you. Nicely done.
The haiku is my favorite. The picture and your writing gives us the “hope” that spring is just around the corner. You have a distinct voice in your writing.
Comment by Nicole Atkins — February 27, 2008 @ 11:23 pm
Your found poem flows really well and I am impressed how you connected all of those phrases. heather
Comment by hlhm — March 18, 2008 @ 8:58 pm
I love your poem on Saturn. You have a gift for writing. I could have never made a poem like that if I tried. Awesome:)
Comment by jsward — March 19, 2008 @ 6:52 pm